Week 3 Julie

[julierappaport]

Internet was down since Saturday- think it’s back up.

Please note: these 500 word submissions are not in any order. FYI Poppy is Lucy’s young child who is back home in the US. Cooper is Poppy’s father. Ama is Lucy’s grandma, Rebecca is Lucy’s mother and Nita is the friend she met in her aunt’s villa in India.

This scene.
Nita has dropped Lucy off at the temple. Lucy enters it alone and all kinds of things happen.

Discussion

[Elizabeth]

Julie,

 

I love the mysteries introduced in this section and the strong sense of sensation that dominates this scene through her muddled brain. Some powerful writing here.

 

 

I still found myself needing a few more details when her eyes opened or she interacted with someone specific. The kind voice stayed a little too removed and generic for me. That might be how she’d remember him but in the moment he’d be somewhat specific, wouldn’t he?

 

 

Nita is powerful here. I want to keep spying, too.

 

Warmly,

 

Elizabeth

 

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