Sabina Week 5

[Sabina]

Hello All,

 

Thank you all for your continued help.  I feel like I am actually learning what I need to write and omit with this class.

 

Please find next piece from Zahra’s POV.  Zahra is Sabrina’s sister.  Sabrina is the one who lost her child.

 

Thank you!

 

Sabina

Discussion

[Devi S. Laskar]

good work sabina! i left you a longish note at the bottom of your submission along with my edits.

best,
devi

[thais]

Dear Sabina,

Another touching scene capturing the heartbreak of losing a child.

Thais

[Elizabeth]

 

Sabina,

 

 

I love this narrator’s voice, her sensitivity and also her need for her big sister who took care of her. This is a very moving and difficult scene. The scene itself feels very true, but just sketched in. Dig into the specifics—you’ve got the whole scene mapped out, now bring it more fully and specifically to life with concrete detail. This is important, beautiful work.

 

 

Warmly,

Elizabeth

[Author]

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