Jody- Week 2-Snow

[Jody-Brettkelly]

Jody Brettkelly-Week 2- Snow

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[julierappaport]

Here is mine for jody

Jody: the writing is so fresh and alive. I am drawn right into the scene and I love the rhythm of the speech including the fun non-american words for things. : ) You have a unique vantage point being to write this from afar and it gives you power to fill in the details a little bit more. The set-up and story is so real and I am enjoying each installment.

I feel like there is so much in here to carry you through. I think at this point as I have read enough to know that this book is about the sisters …so (you maybe have already done this) but I would love to have markers to distinguish each sister. One has red hair, what else? What other physical characteristics distinguish each sister: that would help me a lot. Size, voice, color of hair etc. Strong writing, Keep moving it forward.

[Elizabeth]

Jody—

 

I like her. I love the dynamics here, all the politics from CeeCee and Snow, the suspicious behavior of his kindness, his knowing who she is. The sisters cuing him. Great. This is a lot of fun.

 

 

 I’ve marked a couple of places where I was confused or wanted more, but I was pulled through by the tension in the social dynamics.

Great. (More comments in ms.)

 

 

Warmly,

Elizabeth

[Elizabeth]

Jody’s ms with Elizabeth’s comments–did not seem to be attached before.

 

[Author]

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