Angie Week 1

[Angie Powers]

Hey, thanks for reading my work this week. I’m wondering if you find the dog character believable.

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[Angie Powers]

I totally believed the dog! I loved the way she found the duck and gave it a hug, even though you had no idea if the duck was a bad duck or not.

I thought the way you created sentences was awesome. I’ve not seen semi-colon usage like that in a long time.

[Devi S. Laskar]

good evening! thanks for the example sentences angie, I hadn’t seen the word duck used in quite that way in about 10 years 🙂

 

enclosed is a 500 word excerpt of circa, my novel in progress, on the exploits of Dia and her lover Crash.

[Sabina]

Dear Laskar,

Wow, that was intense from the beginning until the very end when she kissed him!  Makes me wonder why she would kiss him?  To prove something?  Or did she have feelings for him?  Is this part of a novel or on it’s own?

Thank you for sharing.

PS just read that Crash was Dia’s lover, makes it more juicy!

Sabina

[Author]

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